I have stuff I should be doing, so of course I get caught up writing a challenge prompt instead. Oy! Here, have a drabble.

Title: A hard rain’s gonna fall
Fandom: Supernatural
Author: [livejournal.com profile] starrylizard
Rating: Gen, G, 100 word drabble, preseason.
Warnings/Spoilers: none
Author Notes:: Takes place sometime shortly after John left Kansas. Title taken from Bob Dylan lyrics. Prompt = Rain. Originally posted here


The rain beats down on the roof with a steady tink and patter. Outside the world’s a dark blur, the windows long since fogged by their breath.

John’s stretched out as best he can along the front seat, knees up, Sam a warm bundle across his chest. He watches Dean’s hand push a toy car along the seat back, making quiet vroom noises, so as not to wake his brother. The black leather of John’s jacket is rolled up so it doesn’t swallow his son’s tiny hands completely. He’s warm at least.

John smiles sadly and the rain beats down.


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From: [identity profile] montisello.livejournal.com


I just can't get how you were able to take 100 words and create such atmosphere, such character, such a scene as this. I love it to pieces. I can hear the rain on the car's roof. Wonderful.

From: [identity profile] iamstealthyone.livejournal.com


Nicely done, with great imagery throughout. And I especially like the care Dean takes with Sammy in this line:

He watches Dean’s hand push a toy car along the seat back, making quiet vroom noises, so as not to wake his brother.

and the care John's taken with Dean here:

The black leather of John’s jacket is rolled up so it doesn’t swallow his son’s tiny hands completely. He’s warm at least.

From: [identity profile] stars91.livejournal.com


You painted an excellent picture in so few words! Very well done!

Thank you for sharing it with us!

From: [identity profile] starrylizard.livejournal.com


Thank you! :)

I keep forgetting I'm allowed to post other gen stuff over on the comm. *facepalm* Latest fic in point. I'll try to remember. Hee!

From: [identity profile] looleebelle.livejournal.com


This is Belle, stalking the halls of your LJ.

*lurks*

This is fucking BRILLIANT. Excuse my french, but Urgh. This is perfection in a hundred words. Gorgeous.

From: [identity profile] starrylizard.livejournal.com


Thank you! I'm generally much better at shorter fic. :)

Glad you enjoyed it! \o/

From: [identity profile] tifaching.livejournal.com


Oh, that's lovely. Such a good look at the first days after they hit the road with Sammy just a wee babe. Also, fantastic drabble!
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